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PostSubject: The Taylor ( Story by Lucky.)   Thu 06 Jun 2013, 10:55 pm

" Hey look, It's The Taylor! Don't get too close, she's an unknown species of Alien! She's the only one of her kind, because no one wants to " MATE" with her!" Jessica snorted, pointing to me as the several others girls at her lunch table laughed. I sighed, raising my book over my face to cover it. I continued reading, trying to blink away the tears as I contined to hear Jessica make fun of me. " Just ignore it, Taylor." I said to myself, gritting my teeth. Finally, the bell rang, and I grabbed my lunch. I struggled to make my way through the halls, when Jessica and her friends catch up to me. Jessica snatches the book out of my hand, holding high up. " Sorry, The Taylors can't read! It's proven that their IQs are below 10, making them extremely stupid!" She smirked, tearing the pages out of my book. " HEY!" I yell, attempting to grab the book from Jessica's hands. She pulls it to her chest. " EW, GET YOU'RE DISGUSTING HANDS AWAY FROM ME! I DON'T NEED TO GET ALIEN AIDS!" She shouts, backing away. " The book is probably contaminated, too!" Her friend, Lexi, joins in. She takes the book from Jessica, plugging her nose as she makes her way to the trash. Finally, she throws it away, and the girls walk away, laughing.



SORRY IF THERE'S ANY INAPPROPRIATE LANGUAGE!


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PostSubject: Re: The Taylor ( Story by Lucky.)   Thu 06 Jun 2013, 11:37 pm

No inappropriate language here. But please make sure the topic is appropriate for the forum. It's a good story, but you need to choose if you're using first or third person. I prefer 3rd, but it's up to you. It would be nice to have this turn into something really good, unlike the stereotypical nerd stories. Thanks for posting.
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PostSubject: Re: The Taylor ( Story by Lucky.)   Fri 07 Jun 2013, 2:28 am

Oh, I hate stereotypical stories! Don't worry, I have something planned out.


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PostSubject: Re: The Taylor ( Story by Lucky.)   Fri 07 Jun 2013, 4:21 am

Its pretty good so far C:
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PostSubject: Re: The Taylor ( Story by Lucky.)   Fri 07 Jun 2013, 4:27 am

Thank you.


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PostSubject: Re: The Taylor ( Story by Lucky.)   Fri 07 Jun 2013, 4:30 am

This is good,maybe add a bit more detail and emotion and this can turn into something special!



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PostSubject: Re: The Taylor ( Story by Lucky.)   Fri 07 Jun 2013, 4:32 am

@Ava thank you for the feedback; I'll use it when I continue this story!


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PostSubject: Re: The Taylor ( Story by Lucky.)   Fri 07 Jun 2013, 4:44 am

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@Ava thank you for the feedback; I'll use it when I continue this story!

No problem ! <3 I bet its gonna be good!



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PostSubject: Re: The Taylor ( Story by Lucky.)   Fri 07 Jun 2013, 4:48 am

@Ava Aw, you're too sweet. YOU SUGAR COAT ME! ;D <3


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PostSubject: Re: The Taylor ( Story by Lucky.)   Fri 07 Jun 2013, 5:33 am

Lucky wrote:
Thank you.

Two word post. Posts must be 3 words or more. Warning given. You're a new moderator, we will not cut slack.
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PostSubject: Re: The Taylor ( Story by Lucky.)   Fri 07 Jun 2013, 5:36 am

It was an accident; Sorry. .-.


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PostSubject: Re: The Taylor ( Story by Lucky.)   Fri 07 Jun 2013, 5:40 am

this is really good!
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PostSubject: Re: The Taylor ( Story by Lucky.)   Fri 07 Jun 2013, 5:40 am

linda88 wrote:
this is really good!

Why thank you very much! I'm glad you enjoyed it!


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PostSubject: Re: The Taylor ( Story by Lucky.)   Fri 07 Jun 2013, 6:29 am

Please continue. What happened to the flower killer though?
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PostSubject: Re: The Taylor ( Story by Lucky.)   Fri 07 Jun 2013, 6:31 am

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Please continue. What happened to the flower killer though?


I'm writing Flower Killer on my own; Not sharing it online.


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PostSubject: Re: The Taylor ( Story by Lucky.)   Fri 07 Jun 2013, 6:34 am

Oh, I really wanted to see what happened to the girl.
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PostSubject: Re: The Taylor ( Story by Lucky.)   Fri 07 Jun 2013, 6:37 am

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Oh, I really wanted to see what happened to the girl.

I'll tell you here.

Marie doesn't have her own emotions. She just follows whatever her thoughts say, creating emotions. She's crazy. Like, literally, she's nuts. For her, time goes extremely fast, so when she murdered the lady, she still was in the alley. Kind of like seeing the future, I guess? Anyways, She drowns herself because she can't keep up with time. However, since she's always ahead of time, she can never escape the hell.


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PostSubject: Re: The Taylor ( Story by Lucky.)   Fri 07 Jun 2013, 7:25 am

Okay. Thank you. Please limit your curse words. We do not use "hell" here. Only in the chatbox. Warning given. That's 3 today. Next time would be an infraction.
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PostSubject: Re: The Taylor ( Story by Lucky.)   Fri 07 Jun 2013, 8:13 am

I didn't know that. Do you think you can make it more clear in the rules? Thanks. Anyway, it is a little bit hard to understand Marie's character.


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PostSubject: Re: The Taylor ( Story by Lucky.)   Fri 07 Jun 2013, 7:01 pm

It's simple. 3 strikes and your out. I written there that first you'll receive a warning for your wrongdoings, but the next time it's an infraction. You're still a new moderator here.
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PostSubject: Re: The Taylor ( Story by Lucky.)   Fri 07 Jun 2013, 7:49 pm

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Okay. Thank you. Please limit your curse words. We do not use "hell" here. Only in the chatbox. Warning given. That's 3 today. Next time would be an infraction.
Hell isn't that much of a bad word Faith.
And giving a warning to someone who made two words in a post is unacceptable.
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PostSubject: Re: The Taylor ( Story by Lucky.)   Fri 07 Jun 2013, 7:58 pm

Gareki, please don't stand up to the staff members. This is rude. Hell is a bad word on this forum, this is for ages 8-17 it can be ranged. To keep it on the safe side we are not using that language on the forum.

Our rules are strictly for this forum, made by the staff.
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PostSubject: Re: The Taylor ( Story by Lucky.)   Fri 07 Jun 2013, 8:07 pm

Faith wrote:
Gareki, please don't stand up to the staff members. This is rude. Hell is a bad word on this forum, this is for ages 8-17 it can be ranged. To keep it on the safe side we are not using that language on the forum.

Our rules are strictly for this forum, made by the staff.
Hell was used in the bible, so im pretty sure it isn't that much of a bad word there are tons of way worse words than that. And I never was trying to be rude I was just saying.
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PostSubject: Re: The Taylor ( Story by Lucky.)   Fri 07 Jun 2013, 8:21 pm

I know, but for children it can be. Please don't push. Hell is not used on the forum, only in the chatbox. No offense taken.
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PostSubject: Re: The Taylor ( Story by Lucky.)   Fri 07 Jun 2013, 8:23 pm

Hell is NOT a bad word,its used a lot so No.Also,Moderators don't get warnings or Infractions.

@Gareki You won't receive and infraction this time.



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